abridged version for "alice's amazing visit to wonderland." edited by n. Tal
intro: i saw two abridged versions which were justified due to the original having TOO much thoughts and rare words or outdated expressions. rhymes which were parodies of contemporary rhymes were skipped since that era had long passed. however when i compared them i saw that those abridged versions wrongly cut out dialog which is important according to this book. a summary should minimize talk and say events but abridging should not lose dialog unless it has rare words. also they did not fix the rare words or left out too much so i will edit a new abridged version less flawed than both the original and the 2 flawed abridged versions that i know. considering the book has no danger the title "adventure is false" the title should be "alice's amazing visit to wonderland."
chapter ONE; Down the Rabbit Hole
On a very hot day,
on the fourth of month May [chapters 6 & 7],
under a cliff
Al felt bored stiff
by a boat that was moored,
Alice felt very bored.
Alice was sitting with her teen sister Alexa Agnis Allinson. they sat on a pale green sheet, under a tree for shade, by a farm yard and a stream. beyond it she saw a shepherd boy with sheep.
Alice felt bored so she looked in the book Alexa was reading. it had no pictures nor conversations. Alice felt very bored until alexa turned the page. she looked again and saw these pages also lacked conversations and pictures. she told Alexa, "your book is bad." Alexa said, "i agree." Alice said, "please read me a story." Alexa replied, "not now." Alice heard a brushing sound in the grass and looked. a White Rabbit ran nearby. the Rabbit stopped and took a WATCH out from its WAISTCOAT POCKET. This surprised Alice because she had never before seen a rabbit with a waistcoat pocket, or seen one with a watch to take out of it. the waistcoat covered a light blue shirt. it was red with a pink pocket. Rabbit checked the time. She heard the Rabbit say to itself, "No! I shall be late!' before hurrying away. Alice jumped and chased it. [parallel old version: She was sitting by her teen sister Alexa Agnis Allenson. twice she looked in the book Alexa was reading, and saw no pictures nor conversations. She told Alexa, "your book is bad." She heard a brushing sound in the grass and looked. a White Rabbit with "pink eyes" ran nearby. the Rabbit stopped and took a WATCH out from its WAISTCOAT POCKET. This surprised Alice because she had never before seen a rabbit with a waistcoat pocket, or seen one with a watch to take out of it. it checked the time. She heard the Rabbit say to itself, "Oh dear! Oh dear! I shall be late!' before hurrying away. Alice jumped and chased it.
She ran and saw it go down a large rabbit-hole. Alice crawled "down" after it and went straight until suddenly she fell downward.
First, she looked down and saw that the well was very deep and dark. she looked at the sides of the well that had cupboards and shelves that she passed very slowly. from a shelf, She took a jar labeld:"ORANGE Jam', but it was empty, so she put it in a cupboard as she fell past it.
She fell faster and swished past more shelves. she heard the woosh of air. She was falling for a very long time. down, down, down. she thought by now she must be near the center of the earth. She continued falling and began thinking again: I wonder if I shall fall THROUGH the earth. I shall need to ask someone what is the name of the isle?
Down, down, down. she finally landed on a giant pile of dry leaves. Alice was not hurt. she chased the White Rabbit along a long tunnel. it turned a corner, she turned the corner into a long, low hall. a row of lamps hanging from the roof lit it. she could not see the Rabbit. She walked to a little three-legged table, all made of glass. only a tiny golden key lay on it. Alice saw many doors but one was a low door. the size of the key might be a hint. she knelt down, tried it in the lock, and found that it fit. She opened the door. to her great delight she saw a gorgeous garden, the loveliest one you ever saw. she wished that she could walk among those bright flowers. The opening was too small, even for her head, and certainly for her shoulders. She again started wishing that "I could shrink like my wool sweater shrunk, because here almost anything is possible." she went back to the table, where a small bottle now stood. she law lemon-yellow fluid inside it. a paper label was hanging from its neck with the words "DRINK ME' beautifully printed on it in large green letters. she hoped the word drink would cause shrink because they sound similar. She checked that the bottle was NOT marked "poison' . Alice smelled the fluid, and found the fragrance of baked turkey. she tasted it [it felt thick, and was lemon-yellow, hoping it would make her "low" like ye-low] finding a mixed flavor of cherry with pineapple. she drank all of it. suddenly, she felt an odd feeling. she shrunk until she fit the low door. her face showed joy that she could enter the lovely garden.
she went to the door, and found it locked. the little golden key was on the table. now, she could not possibly reach it. she saw it through the glass. she tried her best to climb up one of the legs of the table, but the glass was too slippery. she stretched her arms up, but it was too far. she also stretched her feet and stood on her toes, but she was too far. she jumped but not high enough so she continued trying to jump higher... until she felt too tired. the helpless "little" girl sat down and cried.
she recalled that sadness is a bad trait. she tried to stop crying but continued sobbing despite distracting herself from sadness. she wished she could grow tall enough to get the key. she showed the number on her fingers as she said "i wish 4 for growing taller." then she noticed a glass box that was lying under the table. its glass was like the frost on a window. she opened it, and found in it a very small cake. it had orange cream. the side she faced had "t" added using purple cream. she turned it and the next side lacked any letter. she turned it more and saw a blue "e" then red "a" and again the "t". the word "EAT' she did, hoping she got her wish. she tasted the cream that was orange and orange flavor. she felt surprised that she remained the same size. same as when anybody eats cake. this seemed dull and stupid. she started thinking about her pet cat.
chapter TWO; tears, CHAPTER 2 Tears;
after Alice ate the tiny cake which had frosting both colored and flavored orange, she grew tall. She said to her feet, "Good bye, feet' [should not skip:] when she looked down at her feet, they seemed very far away. [justifiably skipped thinking] then her head reached the 9 foot roof of the low hall. [note the british author used feet also french interstellar captain in next generation!] she took the golden key and hurried to open the low door. she was lying on her side looking into the garden with one of her eyes. she was further away from fitting than before. her eyes filled with tears and Alice began to cry again. she cried gallons of huge tears that made a large puddle.
she heard feet running and dried her eyes to see what was coming. It was the White Rabbit holding a fan and hurrying. when the Rabbit came near her, she began, in a soft voice, "If you please, sir...' but before she could continue, the Rabbit dropped the fan, and ran away. Alice picked up the fan. the hall was hot, so she started fanning herself. Alice asked herself, "now that i changed tall, Who am I? she answered Alice, "i am not any other girl because SHE is her not me." she saw that she was shrinking small again due to the fan. She went to the table to compare herself. now she was shorter and continuing to shrink. she felt a bit nervous about becoming "like the flame of a candle after the candle got blown out." she was in salt water up to her chin. she feared she would shrink until nothing and was in DANGER of reaching her end, so she dropped the fan, thinking the fan was causing this.
she swam to the low door and found it was locked again, the golden key was lying on the glass table as before, Alice was further from reaching the key than ever. "I never was this small, ever!" somebody said, it was her own voice aloud. she was in the tears which she had wept when she was nine feet high. [dont skip:] she swam to find the shore. she heard splashing nearby. she swam nearer to it and saw a mouse. she hoped it could talk same as the rabbit. she began: "O Mouse, do you know the way out?" it said nothing so she began speaking again. the first sentence in her French lesson-book was: "Ou est ma chatte?' which means cat. understandably, the Mouse leaped up out of the water. it trembled with fright. Alice apologized, "Oh, I beg your pardon, you don't like cats.'
"Not like cats!' exclaimed the Mouse, "Would YOU like cats if you were me?' she tried to soothe it, by agreeing, "No,' in a soothing tone and added, "still, I wish I could show you our cat Dinah. if you could see it, such a dear!' [dont skip activity:] she swam lazily about in the salt water sea. the Mouse was trembling to the end of its tail, so she pledged "We won't talk about "c" anymore.' it argued, "We? as if I would talk about those killers. Our family HATED cats: nasty, immoral things!" Alice, hurried to change the subject to dogs: "near our home lives a nice little terrier, with oh, such long curly brown hair!" she exclaimed. then alice continued, "it'll fetch things when you throw them, and it'll sit up, and all sorts of things. I can't remember. it is very useful: it kills rats and, oh dear!' cried Alice in a sorrowful tone. her only friend was hastily swimming away from her, leaving her lonely, so she called softly after it, "Mouse dear! Do come back. i won't talk about "d". When the Mouse heard this, it turned back and swam to her. it said in a low trembling voice, "We ought to go to the shore. there I'll tell you why I hate c's and d's.' the mouse swam and led Alice to a group. she felt crowded by the many animals and birds that were near her. she noticed a rare Dodo. somebody said, "my name is Lory." Also a Duck and an Eaglet were with her. the mouse swam and led them to the shore.
CHAPTER 3; A Caucus-Race and a Long Tale
note to chapters one and two: despite the fact that a story with details is good, still this amazing book alice has too much "thoughts" and rare words. other abridged versions did not improve the rare words and sometimes skipped too much conversation or activity admittedly they justifiably skipped the poems which were parodies of contemporary poems no longer popular. so i provide a less flawed abridged version.
despite some additions , the abridging shortened to: chapter 2=720/2100 and 929/2150 abridging 2600 words of thoughts and parodies of lost poems. 2144+2100=4250
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