my summary of cliff, hardy boys, by dixon.
intro: dixon wrote QUALITY stories with danger, detailed difficulties, surprises and suspense. he also ruined the start with roughness instead of "describing the characters" at the start.
first i replace the bad rough start. instead of starting with "talking and vagueness" where the decription of characters belongs i will fix and summarize.
__ the cliff by dixon
ONE
Joe rode a motorcycle home from Bayport school. his BLOND [page 2] hair was hidden by a crimson colored simple safety helmet. his blue eyes [p. 2, obviously his eyes were white with a black circle but the varied part was blue] were safe from dirt due to goggles. he slowed down so his brother, Frank, age 18 and precisely "a year older," could keep nearby [using these clues can you young detectives determine joe's age?]. Frank's dark hair matched his black helmet, which had a thick plastic visor shielding his eyes that were dark brown like milk chocolate.
Joe rushed upstairs to his dad's "second floor study", even before doing the boring simple school homework, as usual. "I want to help you on another case", Joe excitedly said to his famous father Fenton, a detective, who was known internationally. pa replied smiling, "alone?" joe frowned and conceded, "with Frank."
"you teens want some dangerous adventure?" Mr. Hardy asked. Frank entered the study and combed his dark brown hair using his fingers. "Dad, yesterday you told us that the case you are working on now, is very mysterious. the police failed to find the secret successful smugglers" said Frank, "you could use our help, we could tackle some angle of it." Pa gazed out the window at the bay, and answered, "you will like to find smugglers."
"we can capture them" Joe replied in a voice of anticipation. Pa corrected him, "that is too dangerous. i meant spy on them from a safe distance." the "lean athletic detective" turned back to face his sons, both taller than their classmates, saying, "take my telescope, which you practiced using, and watch the bay for smugglers." He explained that legal drugs were missing in various places in u.s. and probably smuggled and sold here on the east coast of the states. "Saturday after lunch, go 8 miles [north] to the pollitt place, where Mr. p. died around a month ago. from there you will see a wide view of the sea. Just plan to return for supper. now to your school work," pa urged.
Saturday afternoon Frank and Joe rode to their buddies and invited two to ride with them. Chet stopped working on his car that he had purchased used, quickly swallowed some carrot cake, and climbed onto joe's bike. Chet ate too much and that showed ergo he rode with the younger brother. [fixing page 5 and 4]. frank rode with his classmate Biff who had eyesight even better than the hardy's. none of he 4 needed spectacles in contrast to most of their classmates.
[after the detailed start i can summarize the exciting story with selected exciting parts in chapters 2,3,4].
they set up the telescope at the vacant home. they were lucky enuf to see someone climb down a ladder from a big boat into a smaller ship. they heard a scream, "help" and hurried to help... as they climbed in a window they heard "help"... but nobody was in any room [c2] when they returned to the telescope, the lense was missing. frank said "i hope they did not steal our motorcycles too!" they were relieved to find their bikes.
they rode home to tell pa about the odd boat but on the way home... when they Frank's motor stalled. he opened his seat and saw his tools were stolen like the lense. luckily, chet had some tools in his pocket from his work on his engine. frank reconnected his engine and they continued riding... until a new danger! rocks from the side of a hill were rushing down [c3] like a minor avalanche that knocked Frank's bike over. "you are lucky," chet commented. "joe argued, "not lucky enuf to keep the lense."
when they were stopped and almost ready to continue the ride home... they saw movement on the bay. a speedboat was moving away from a curved cliff. soon they saw another ship chasing it. when it neared someone on the chase boat threw something at the lead boat... "a sheet of flame" [p. 25] blasted high up and the guy on the lead boat flew into the bay.
they swam and rescued him. they led him to a nearby farm house to rest. finally theu returned their pals home and arrived at their home. they reported to pa over a dinner of chicken parmissian and glass cups with cold milk.
they discussed the possibilities why he had sailed away and why they had tried to bomb him using a hand grenade.
chapter 5 pretzel pete
t.b.c.
intro: dixon wrote QUALITY stories with danger, detailed difficulties, surprises and suspense. he also ruined the start with roughness instead of "describing the characters" at the start.
first i replace the bad rough start. instead of starting with "talking and vagueness" where the decription of characters belongs i will fix and summarize.
__ the cliff by dixon
ONE
Joe rode a motorcycle home from Bayport school. his BLOND [page 2] hair was hidden by a crimson colored simple safety helmet. his blue eyes [p. 2, obviously his eyes were white with a black circle but the varied part was blue] were safe from dirt due to goggles. he slowed down so his brother, Frank, age 18 and precisely "a year older," could keep nearby [using these clues can you young detectives determine joe's age?]. Frank's dark hair matched his black helmet, which had a thick plastic visor shielding his eyes that were dark brown like milk chocolate.
Joe rushed upstairs to his dad's "second floor study", even before doing the boring simple school homework, as usual. "I want to help you on another case", Joe excitedly said to his famous father Fenton, a detective, who was known internationally. pa replied smiling, "alone?" joe frowned and conceded, "with Frank."
"you teens want some dangerous adventure?" Mr. Hardy asked. Frank entered the study and combed his dark brown hair using his fingers. "Dad, yesterday you told us that the case you are working on now, is very mysterious. the police failed to find the secret successful smugglers" said Frank, "you could use our help, we could tackle some angle of it." Pa gazed out the window at the bay, and answered, "you will like to find smugglers."
"we can capture them" Joe replied in a voice of anticipation. Pa corrected him, "that is too dangerous. i meant spy on them from a safe distance." the "lean athletic detective" turned back to face his sons, both taller than their classmates, saying, "take my telescope, which you practiced using, and watch the bay for smugglers." He explained that legal drugs were missing in various places in u.s. and probably smuggled and sold here on the east coast of the states. "Saturday after lunch, go 8 miles [north] to the pollitt place, where Mr. p. died around a month ago. from there you will see a wide view of the sea. Just plan to return for supper. now to your school work," pa urged.
Saturday afternoon Frank and Joe rode to their buddies and invited two to ride with them. Chet stopped working on his car that he had purchased used, quickly swallowed some carrot cake, and climbed onto joe's bike. Chet ate too much and that showed ergo he rode with the younger brother. [fixing page 5 and 4]. frank rode with his classmate Biff who had eyesight even better than the hardy's. none of he 4 needed spectacles in contrast to most of their classmates.
[after the detailed start i can summarize the exciting story with selected exciting parts in chapters 2,3,4].
they set up the telescope at the vacant home. they were lucky enuf to see someone climb down a ladder from a big boat into a smaller ship. they heard a scream, "help" and hurried to help... as they climbed in a window they heard "help"... but nobody was in any room [c2] when they returned to the telescope, the lense was missing. frank said "i hope they did not steal our motorcycles too!" they were relieved to find their bikes.
they rode home to tell pa about the odd boat but on the way home... when they Frank's motor stalled. he opened his seat and saw his tools were stolen like the lense. luckily, chet had some tools in his pocket from his work on his engine. frank reconnected his engine and they continued riding... until a new danger! rocks from the side of a hill were rushing down [c3] like a minor avalanche that knocked Frank's bike over. "you are lucky," chet commented. "joe argued, "not lucky enuf to keep the lense."
when they were stopped and almost ready to continue the ride home... they saw movement on the bay. a speedboat was moving away from a curved cliff. soon they saw another ship chasing it. when it neared someone on the chase boat threw something at the lead boat... "a sheet of flame" [p. 25] blasted high up and the guy on the lead boat flew into the bay.
they swam and rescued him. they led him to a nearby farm house to rest. finally theu returned their pals home and arrived at their home. they reported to pa over a dinner of chicken parmissian and glass cups with cold milk.
they discussed the possibilities why he had sailed away and why they had tried to bomb him using a hand grenade.
chapter 5 pretzel pete
t.b.c.
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