my summary of pan peter
intro: barrie was an extremely unskilled writer trying to publish the great ideas of the imaginative kids he conversed with. he delayed his AMAZING tale of flying kids by FORTY TWO Pages OF COMMMON STUFF IN HORRIDLY BAD ORDER until they finally flew.
luckily skilled people realized the problems and smoothed out the non-kid book for simpler reading i recomended arneson's skillful adaptation.
still delaying the flying kids by 42 pages is absurd!
sure a quality author knows to start with a common world and gradually lead readers to the unexpected but how slowly is reasonable?
so i will replace the first 42 pages of "peter and wendy' the book which developed from and was influenced by the play that preceded the book.
chapter 1=c1
Wendy lived in a house at address fourteen (14). she lived with her two parents and two brothers. [nuf! get to the good stuff already not the arguments should we have kids or not?]
on a clear night ma helped her kids to bed. she dozed and dreamt that the window blew open! a young boy who had ALL his children teeth, not even losing one! stood in the room. when he saw the adult he flew out the window. their dog JUMPED and tried to shut the window... it closed on peter pan's shadow which got stuck in the window.
me screamed as she realized the boy jumping out the window would certainly die.
she ran to the window and looked down but the street was empty. she looked up into the starry clear sky. syrely she was only dreaming! she left. wendy heard ma's scream and awoke she put the shadow in a drawer.
c2 peter returned for his shadow. wendy gave it back but it would not stick to his feet so tears filled his eyes. wendy knew how to sew-so she sewed the shadow to his shoes.
c3 peter was happy and flew around the room. he said "i can fly because i was a bird that hatched from an egg [chapter 12]. peter claimed all children were birds so you can try too! wendy doubted and told her brothers to practice OVER the soft bed. li'l mike jumped and flew but just for a moment falling on the bed.
wendy explained that he stopd being a bird. michael wanted to fly so the fairy tinkerbell sprinkled fairy dust on him and he flew. peter pan grabbed tink and shook her fairy dust on wendy and john too. they flew out the window and around tall buildings. they flew over the sea all night and continued flying in the morning until peter said he saw the isle of never land. the kids felt hungry so peter grabbed bread from the birds. they continued flying until dark and came over the isle called neverland.
pirates SHOT a dangerous bomb at the kids. as they heard it whistling toward them they scattered and flew aside. johns hat was blasted aside by the exploding cannonball so wendy grabbed the hat. tinkerbell led wendy "home'.
the brothers flew toward the island. peter was pushed up high and waited before he flew down.
meanwhile, tink led wendy to the lost boys she lied that peter said 'shoot wendy bird'. the kids wanted to obey peter and did not distinguish that peter had not told them! one shot an arrow at wendy and wendy was hurt... she fell down with an arrow stuck in her chest gasp.... MUST NOT end a chapter like that. wendy was still breathing. one of the six brats was proud that he had shot wendy. peter came down adn saw wendy was hit. he saw that a necklace had saved her from the arrow.
they went underground to hide from (parents x oops that was my mind) pirates.. there wendy made the "hole" a "home". she swept and told stories to the brats for example the story "cinderella".
the brats went to the lagoon. they heard singing from the mermaids.
they swam and floated. peter warned them pirates were coming. they swam under the water and hid.
the cruel pirates had captured the redskin princess. they tied her in rope and planned to leave her on the rock where she would drown to death when the water of the tide will rise. peter will rescue her but how will peter rescue her?
find out in arneson's adaptation, in chapter lagoon...
i replaced the first 42 pages and much of the book. either read adaptation or i will summarize the rest.
to be continued.
intro: barrie was an extremely unskilled writer trying to publish the great ideas of the imaginative kids he conversed with. he delayed his AMAZING tale of flying kids by FORTY TWO Pages OF COMMMON STUFF IN HORRIDLY BAD ORDER until they finally flew.
luckily skilled people realized the problems and smoothed out the non-kid book for simpler reading i recomended arneson's skillful adaptation.
still delaying the flying kids by 42 pages is absurd!
sure a quality author knows to start with a common world and gradually lead readers to the unexpected but how slowly is reasonable?
so i will replace the first 42 pages of "peter and wendy' the book which developed from and was influenced by the play that preceded the book.
chapter 1=c1
Wendy lived in a house at address fourteen (14). she lived with her two parents and two brothers. [nuf! get to the good stuff already not the arguments should we have kids or not?]
on a clear night ma helped her kids to bed. she dozed and dreamt that the window blew open! a young boy who had ALL his children teeth, not even losing one! stood in the room. when he saw the adult he flew out the window. their dog JUMPED and tried to shut the window... it closed on peter pan's shadow which got stuck in the window.
me screamed as she realized the boy jumping out the window would certainly die.
she ran to the window and looked down but the street was empty. she looked up into the starry clear sky. syrely she was only dreaming! she left. wendy heard ma's scream and awoke she put the shadow in a drawer.
c2 peter returned for his shadow. wendy gave it back but it would not stick to his feet so tears filled his eyes. wendy knew how to sew-so she sewed the shadow to his shoes.
c3 peter was happy and flew around the room. he said "i can fly because i was a bird that hatched from an egg [chapter 12]. peter claimed all children were birds so you can try too! wendy doubted and told her brothers to practice OVER the soft bed. li'l mike jumped and flew but just for a moment falling on the bed.
wendy explained that he stopd being a bird. michael wanted to fly so the fairy tinkerbell sprinkled fairy dust on him and he flew. peter pan grabbed tink and shook her fairy dust on wendy and john too. they flew out the window and around tall buildings. they flew over the sea all night and continued flying in the morning until peter said he saw the isle of never land. the kids felt hungry so peter grabbed bread from the birds. they continued flying until dark and came over the isle called neverland.
pirates SHOT a dangerous bomb at the kids. as they heard it whistling toward them they scattered and flew aside. johns hat was blasted aside by the exploding cannonball so wendy grabbed the hat. tinkerbell led wendy "home'.
the brothers flew toward the island. peter was pushed up high and waited before he flew down.
meanwhile, tink led wendy to the lost boys she lied that peter said 'shoot wendy bird'. the kids wanted to obey peter and did not distinguish that peter had not told them! one shot an arrow at wendy and wendy was hurt... she fell down with an arrow stuck in her chest gasp.... MUST NOT end a chapter like that. wendy was still breathing. one of the six brats was proud that he had shot wendy. peter came down adn saw wendy was hit. he saw that a necklace had saved her from the arrow.
they went underground to hide from (parents x oops that was my mind) pirates.. there wendy made the "hole" a "home". she swept and told stories to the brats for example the story "cinderella".
the brats went to the lagoon. they heard singing from the mermaids.
they swam and floated. peter warned them pirates were coming. they swam under the water and hid.
the cruel pirates had captured the redskin princess. they tied her in rope and planned to leave her on the rock where she would drown to death when the water of the tide will rise. peter will rescue her but how will peter rescue her?
find out in arneson's adaptation, in chapter lagoon...
i replaced the first 42 pages and much of the book. either read adaptation or i will summarize the rest.
to be continued.
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