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wonderland chapter 4 The Rabbit's home, by carol, abridged version editor tal
the White Rabbit was coming slowly toward her again, and was looking about for something. she heard it say to itself `Oh my dear paws! Oh my fur and whiskers! Where did i drop them?' Alice guessed that it was looking for the fan. she began searching helpfully and noticed that everything had changed since her swim. she lookd to where the glass table had been but despite its height she could not see it. also the doors and the low door had vanished.
the Rabbit saw Alice, and said, `Mary Ann, what ARE you doing here? Run home and get a pair of gloves and a fan. +dont skip activity "Alice ran in "the direction it pointed to." she came to a small house. on its door was a bright brass sheet with the name `W. RABBIT'. She obeyed by entering. she rushed so she would not meet the real Mary Ann who would send her out before she had found the fan and gloves. [justifiably skip thinking.] she found a fan and three pairs of tiny white gloves on a table by a window. she also saw a little bottle that stood near the looking-glass +but she was hurrying so she went to the table. BEFORE she took the fan, she grew and got stuck. she rememberd that the fan had shrunk her but she was TOO big to move her arm and get it. she realized that the fan's effect had ended. [i censored the error of rushing yet not rushing. and the fan shrinking flaw if she had grabbed it already and the animal pain and much thinking.]
She grew until her head was pressing against the roof, so she crouched. she wished that she held the fan, but it was too late to wish that. She grew more and more. she needed to sit on her knees, +with one elbow against the door, and the other arm out the window. when she poked her toes into a fireplace and up the chimney, she did not grow larger. she felt trapped and sad. she was also annoyed that she had been ordered about by a mouse and a rabbit. she decided, "when I grow up, I'll write a book about this shrinking and stretching, but I'm grown up now."
she heard his voice, and listened: `Mary Ann! Mary Ann! get my gloves.' she trembled so much that she shook the house. when she was silent, the Rabbit came to the door but Alice's elbow was pressed against it. Alice heard it say to itself "I'll go in by the window.' She heard the Rabbit under the window so her hand grabbed some air. She did not hold anything. she heard a cry and a crash of broken glass. She concluded that it was possible it had fallen into a glass cucumber-frame, or something of the sort.
she heard the Rabbit's angry voice, `Pat! Pat!' a voice she had never heard before replied, `I'm here! Digging for apples.
`Come and help me out of THIS!' + she heard more sounds of more broken glass. the rabbit continued, `tell me, Pat, what's that in the window?' pat answered `it's an `arrum.'
`An arm? that size? it fills the whole window!'
+ `Sure, it does, but it's an arm.' [dont skip too much conversation only a bit]. she grabbed again. she heard TWO cries. [ correct to skip too much thinking except a bit: +"I don't want to stay in here any longer!']
She heard wheels, and many voices. she could hear them say: `Where's the other ladder?" +"I only had one, Bill has the other." "Bill bring it here." a silent minute passed until she heard, "Will the roof bear you?" "yes." "Bill go down the chimney!' she heard a little animal scratching about in the chimney.
she heard a SNEEZE from in the chimney, and then shocked voices said together `Bill is flying!'
after a minute, she heard the Rabbit's voice, "what happened to you? Tell us about it.' a weak voice said "i sneezed from the ash and moved up the chimney like a Jack-in-the-box. i flew up in the air like a rocket' +`So you did' said the others.
soon, little pebbles came in a window, and some of them hit her face. they HURT so she shouted, `You must not do that again'. Alice saw that some of the pebbles on the floor changed into little yellow cakes and others into orange cakes. she remembered that orange shrunk her so [dont skip! " she thought it must make me smaller". she lowered her head and stretched her tongue and ate one orange cake. she shrunk until she was small enough to go through the door.
she took one of each color cake hoping to get into the grand garden and for regrowing to her natural size. she now took the fan and a pair of gloves as ordered. she ran out from his home and lay the fan and gloves by the entrance. a crowd of little animals and birds was outside. +do not skip CHARACTERS! The little Lizard, Bill, lay in the middle, by two guinea-pigs. The group ran toward Alice so she ran from them into a thick forest. [skip thinking, have enough already! BUT don't delete CHARACTERS!]
She heard a dog's bark so she looked up. a puppy, much bigger than her was looking down at her with large eyes. she felt frightened that it would step on her or might be hungry, she was in DANGER it could eat her or injure her. Alice hid behind a bush to save herself from getting run over, and getting trampled under its feet. she threw an orange cake. it ate it and shrunk. now that it was not big enough to step on her, she stopped being scared. it ran around the bush toward her and then ran far away from her. the puppy continued a series of short charges at her by running a very little bit forward each time and a longer distance away. it was barking all the time. when it sat down far away, with its tongue hanging out of its mouth, and its great eyes half shut, Alice knew it was tired from running and now no danger. she threw the yellow cake. it ate it and grew to natural puppy size.
She ran until she felt tired. "Such a dear little puppy it was' thought Alice. she leaned against the green stem of a yellow buttercup which was larger than her. she used a leaf to fan herself. Alice looked all around her at the flowers and grass.
she saw a mushroom the same height as herself +[dont delete activity! "she looked under it on both sides of its stem, and behind it. last, she stretched herself up on tiptoe, and looked on its top, over the edge of the mushroom's roof. her eyes met those of a large blue caterpillar, that was sitting on it. its arms were folded.
the White Rabbit was coming slowly toward her again, and was looking about for something. she heard it say to itself `Oh my dear paws! Oh my fur and whiskers! Where did i drop them?' Alice guessed that it was looking for the fan. she began searching helpfully and noticed that everything had changed since her swim. she lookd to where the glass table had been but despite its height she could not see it. also the doors and the low door had vanished.
the Rabbit saw Alice, and said, `Mary Ann, what ARE you doing here? Run home and get a pair of gloves and a fan. +dont skip activity "Alice ran in "the direction it pointed to." she came to a small house. on its door was a bright brass sheet with the name `W. RABBIT'. She obeyed by entering. she rushed so she would not meet the real Mary Ann who would send her out before she had found the fan and gloves. [justifiably skip thinking.] she found a fan and three pairs of tiny white gloves on a table by a window. she also saw a little bottle that stood near the looking-glass +but she was hurrying so she went to the table. BEFORE she took the fan, she grew and got stuck. she rememberd that the fan had shrunk her but she was TOO big to move her arm and get it. she realized that the fan's effect had ended. [i censored the error of rushing yet not rushing. and the fan shrinking flaw if she had grabbed it already and the animal pain and much thinking.]
She grew until her head was pressing against the roof, so she crouched. she wished that she held the fan, but it was too late to wish that. She grew more and more. she needed to sit on her knees, +with one elbow against the door, and the other arm out the window. when she poked her toes into a fireplace and up the chimney, she did not grow larger. she felt trapped and sad. she was also annoyed that she had been ordered about by a mouse and a rabbit. she decided, "when I grow up, I'll write a book about this shrinking and stretching, but I'm grown up now."
she heard his voice, and listened: `Mary Ann! Mary Ann! get my gloves.' she trembled so much that she shook the house. when she was silent, the Rabbit came to the door but Alice's elbow was pressed against it. Alice heard it say to itself "I'll go in by the window.' She heard the Rabbit under the window so her hand grabbed some air. She did not hold anything. she heard a cry and a crash of broken glass. She concluded that it was possible it had fallen into a glass cucumber-frame, or something of the sort.
she heard the Rabbit's angry voice, `Pat! Pat!' a voice she had never heard before replied, `I'm here! Digging for apples.
`Come and help me out of THIS!' + she heard more sounds of more broken glass. the rabbit continued, `tell me, Pat, what's that in the window?' pat answered `it's an `arrum.'
`An arm? that size? it fills the whole window!'
+ `Sure, it does, but it's an arm.' [dont skip too much conversation only a bit]. she grabbed again. she heard TWO cries. [ correct to skip too much thinking except a bit: +"I don't want to stay in here any longer!']
She heard wheels, and many voices. she could hear them say: `Where's the other ladder?" +"I only had one, Bill has the other." "Bill bring it here." a silent minute passed until she heard, "Will the roof bear you?" "yes." "Bill go down the chimney!' she heard a little animal scratching about in the chimney.
she heard a SNEEZE from in the chimney, and then shocked voices said together `Bill is flying!'
after a minute, she heard the Rabbit's voice, "what happened to you? Tell us about it.' a weak voice said "i sneezed from the ash and moved up the chimney like a Jack-in-the-box. i flew up in the air like a rocket' +`So you did' said the others.
soon, little pebbles came in a window, and some of them hit her face. they HURT so she shouted, `You must not do that again'. Alice saw that some of the pebbles on the floor changed into little yellow cakes and others into orange cakes. she remembered that orange shrunk her so [dont skip! " she thought it must make me smaller". she lowered her head and stretched her tongue and ate one orange cake. she shrunk until she was small enough to go through the door.
she took one of each color cake hoping to get into the grand garden and for regrowing to her natural size. she now took the fan and a pair of gloves as ordered. she ran out from his home and lay the fan and gloves by the entrance. a crowd of little animals and birds was outside. +do not skip CHARACTERS! The little Lizard, Bill, lay in the middle, by two guinea-pigs. The group ran toward Alice so she ran from them into a thick forest. [skip thinking, have enough already! BUT don't delete CHARACTERS!]
She heard a dog's bark so she looked up. a puppy, much bigger than her was looking down at her with large eyes. she felt frightened that it would step on her or might be hungry, she was in DANGER it could eat her or injure her. Alice hid behind a bush to save herself from getting run over, and getting trampled under its feet. she threw an orange cake. it ate it and shrunk. now that it was not big enough to step on her, she stopped being scared. it ran around the bush toward her and then ran far away from her. the puppy continued a series of short charges at her by running a very little bit forward each time and a longer distance away. it was barking all the time. when it sat down far away, with its tongue hanging out of its mouth, and its great eyes half shut, Alice knew it was tired from running and now no danger. she threw the yellow cake. it ate it and grew to natural puppy size.
She ran until she felt tired. "Such a dear little puppy it was' thought Alice. she leaned against the green stem of a yellow buttercup which was larger than her. she used a leaf to fan herself. Alice looked all around her at the flowers and grass.
she saw a mushroom the same height as herself +[dont delete activity! "she looked under it on both sides of its stem, and behind it. last, she stretched herself up on tiptoe, and looked on its top, over the edge of the mushroom's roof. her eyes met those of a large blue caterpillar, that was sitting on it. its arms were folded.
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