Sunday, January 30, 2022

abridged version for "alice's amazing visit to wonderland." edited by n. Tal

abridged version for "alice's amazing visit to wonderland." by carol, edited by n. Tal
intro: i saw two abridged versions which were justified due to the original having TOO much thoughts and rare words or outdated expressions. they justifiably did not include rhymes which were parodies of contemporary rhymes since that era had long passed.  however when i compared them i saw that those abridged versions wrongly cut out dialog which is important according to this book. a summary should minimize talk and say events but abridging should not lose dialog unless it has rare words. also they did not fix the rare words or left out too much so i will edit a new abridged version less flawed than both the original and the 2 flawed abridged versions that i know. considering the book has no danger the title "adventure is false" the title should be "alice's amazing visit to wonderland." 
CHAPTER one; Down the Rabbit Hole
  On a very hot day,
on the fourth of month May [chapters 6 & 7], 
by a boat that was moored,
Alice felt very bored.
Alice was sitting by her teen sister Alexa Agnis Allenson.  twice she looked in the book Alexa was reading, and saw no pictures nor conversations. She thought, "such a book is bad." She heard a brushing sound in the grass and looked. a White Rabbit with pink eyes ran nearby.  
the Rabbit stopped and took a WATCH out from its WAISTCOAT POCKET. This surprised Alice because she had never before seen a rabbit with a waistcoat pocket, or seen one with a watch to take out of it. it checked the time. She heard the Rabbit say to itself, `Oh dear! Oh dear! I shall be late!' before hurrying away. Alice jumped and chased it. 
 She ran and saw it go down a large rabbit-hole. Alice crawled down after it and went straight until suddenly she fell downward.
 First, she looked down and saw that the well was very deep and dark. she looked at the sides of the well that had cupboards and shelves that she passed very slowly. from a shelf, She took a jar labeld:`ORANGE Jam', but it was empty, so she put it in a cupboard as she fell past it.
She fell faster and swished past more shelves. she heard the woosh of air. She was falling for a very long time. down, down, down. she thought by now she must be near the center of the earth. She continued falling and began thinking again: I wonder if I shall fall THROUGH the earth. I shall need to ask someone what is the name of the isle?
  Down, down, down. she finally landed on a giant pile of dry leaves. Alice was not hurt. she chased the White Rabbit along a long tunnel. it turned a corner, she turned the corner into a long, low hall. a row of lamps hanging from the roof lit it. she could not see the Rabbit. She walked to a little three-legged table, all made of  glass. only a tiny golden key lay on it. Alice saw many doors but one was a low door. the size of the key might be a hint.  she knelt down, tried it in the lock, and found that it fit. She opened the door. to her great delight she saw the loveliest garden you ever saw. she wished that she could walk among those bright flowers. The opening was too small, even for her head, and certainly for her shoulders. She thought "Oh, how I wish I could shrink like my wool sweater shrunk because here almost anything is possible."
 she went back to the table, where a small bottle now stood. a paper label was hanging from the neck of the bottle with the words `DRINK ME' beautifully printed on it in large letters. She checked that the bottle was NOT marked `poison' so Alice tasted it finding a mixed flavour of cherry with pineapple. she drank all of it and felt strange. she shrunk until she now was only ten inches high. she was now the size for going through the low door into that lovely garden. she felt a little nervous that the shrinking would continue like a candle burns and shrinks until nothing remains. 
 when she got to the locked door, she needed the golden key. she went back to the table for it, and found she could not reach it. she could see it through the glass, and she tried to climb up a leg of the table, but it was too slippery. after trying, she realized she could not enter the pretty garden. tears filled her eyes so she cried.
  Soon she saw a little glass box that was lying under the table. she opened it, and found in it a very small cake, on which were the words `EAT ME'. She ate a little bit, and felt very surprised that she remained the same size, same as when one usually eats cake. Alice had expected to change. at least it was sweet so she ate it. end chapter one.
continued chapters 2 and 3 at link:
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